Ophthalmologist, Storyteller, Poet
Sounds sinister, doesn’t it?
Well, I hope you find the following Haikus anything but ominous…
I resolve to love
changing shapes and colors of
my Autumn body
Eyelashes tremble
under the delightful weight
of early snowflakes
The pitter patter
of a lonely cloud’s anguish
a broken heart heals
I wrote a Haiku today in response to a #vss365 prompt and posted it on twitter before I remembered that I had pledged to include anatomical elements in each Haiku. Obviously, then, I felt compelled to modify it.
I’m posting the original one here and also the modified one. Have a look…
*vss365 (very short story, one for every day of the year)
The original verse:
Iridescent paint
Nature’s sublime canvas glows
Murky air plays foul
The modified Haiku:
Iridescent paint
Nature’s canvas enthralls
The heart yearns afresh
What do you think? Which one works for you?
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