I wrote a Haiku today in response to a #vss365 prompt and posted it on twitter before I remembered that I had pledged to include anatomical elements in each Haiku. Obviously, then, I felt compelled to modify it.
I’m posting the original one here and also the modified one. Have a look…
*vss365 (very short story, one for every day of the year)
The original verse:
Nature’s sublime canvas glows
Murky air plays foul
The modified Haiku:
Nature’s canvas enthralls
The heart yearns afresh
What do you think? Which one works for you?